tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1144041049669146416.post7172797080564992679..comments2012-11-25T21:15:21.919-06:00Comments on Jeanette Kelley's EDM310 Class Blog: Blog Post #5 Jeanettehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00855537246156268917noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1144041049669146416.post-35926713400588735162012-10-04T10:44:59.504-05:002012-10-04T10:44:59.504-05:00" He believe, and so do I, ..." believes..." He believe, and so do I, ..." believes, not believe<br /><br />Travis and his iSchool Initiative team visited with EDM310 this summer.<br /><br />" It must had took a long time..." have taken, not had took<br /><br />"...we should not be entertainment to our students..." Rewrite: ...<i>we should not entertain our students...</i><br /><br />"...because teacher can learn from..." teachers, not teacher<br /><br />"I think teacher should be able to teach..." teachers, not teacher<br /><br />"I think teacher should be able to teach both facts and skills. I feel they should be taught not only the basics but also things that can prepare them for life as well. " In the second student you have begun talking about students. There is no antecedent present for they so the second sentence should be written like this: <i>I feel students should be taught not only the basics but also things that can prepare them for life as well.</i><br /><br />"which I rather had to learn on my own or my grandmother and mother taught me much as they can." Omit rather and change can to could. <br /><br />"There are some teachers that will help their students in anyway." in any way, not in anyway<br /><br />"Katie Gimbar Why I Flipped My Classroom and Ms. Munafo Flipping the Classroom-4th Grade STEM was good sources..." were, not was<br /><br />"It's not inefficient, not engaging and the students do not be focus." Rewrite: <i> It is inefficient, not engaging and the students do not focus on learning.</i> At least that is what I think you meant to say.<br /><br />Your content is good but you must PROOFREAD your work!John Hadley Strangehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17484977903995419205noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1144041049669146416.post-40433508105236922862012-10-01T16:58:42.652-05:002012-10-01T16:58:42.652-05:00Hey Jeanette ,
First let me start by saying I love...Hey Jeanette ,<br />First let me start by saying I love your background, and how everything is so clear and organized.I really like the way you summarized what we have read and watched.The only thing that I saw wrong was a lot of run on sentences and sentence fragments.So I would just suggest to you to proof read your blog before you publish it. I too have these same problems so don't feel bad. It looks to me like you did what was asked of us, in this assignment.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02420521682164136152noreply@blogger.com